As always, take it with an extra grain of salt, as this is merely my very subtle reworking of Coleman Barks' 2001 reworking ("Sour, Doughy, Numb, and Raw") of translations by John Moyne, Arthur J. Arberry, and others from the original Persian. My hope was to try to get a little closer in English to what I felt was the heart of the theme.
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| Holi Festival of Colours |
If we're not together in the heart,
what's the point? When body
and soul aren't dancing, there's
no pleasure in wearing colorful
clothes. What good are cooking
pans when there's no food in the
house? In this world full of fresh
bread, amber and musk—such an
array of fragrances—what are they
to someone with no sense of smell?
If you stay away from fire, you'll
stay
sour, doughy, numb and raw. You may
have lovely, just-baked loaves all
around you, but those friends can't
help. You have to feel the oven's fire
yourself, crust to core. I would never
have known the truth of what love is
had I never felt this boundless
longing.
Anything done to excess becomes
boring,
except this overflow that moves toward
you.

I like the subtle changes better than the Barks one! I could be wrong, but I think this ending comes from lines further down in the original-original text? But it works with the whole theme and some of that Sufi writing is like in the Gospels, where there's this running theme that you have to piece together to see the bigger story!
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